This song is pretty good. After a while it starts to seem like it's just droning on, but I can't stop listening, it's addictive. I really liked it, I would like to use it in an animation, please e-mail me at Sasuke_kun62@yahoo.com if you will let me use it.
This is some good music an inch away from being an effective track.
The beats are really good. The kick seems a little bit too 'clicky' for my liking.
I liked what you did with the bass, but I think you need something a bit more continuous. In the second part of the song, it only pops up every now and then. Some TS-404 bubbling away might do the trick? With some sliding action maybe? If you haven't used slides with the TS-404 yet you're in for some fun.
Also the lead part gets a little repetitive. You change up the melody in the second part and the melody is good, but maybe some effects could get added to it over time?
The ending is abrupt! Putting some delay on the end would make it sound more classy, and maybe rethink that clash at the end.
Keep working at it.
If these are really your first songs, you are doing really well, let me tell you.