It sounds so beautiful, but UHG it's so short! You have so much potential, you can still do a lot but it almost seems, incomplete. Don't get me wrong, what you have here is grate! Don't be afraid to add just a bit more though. I really want to give it a 5/5, but... it just doesn't quench my thirst. It's like you gave me just a drop of the most delicious beverage known to man but you won't give me more.
You have something great going, Have fun with the crescendos, the decrescendos, speed it up slow it down make it broad and biog and majestic or slow and solemn, You can do a lot, just don't limit yourself! You have the skill to make something great out of this!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.