My overall impression on this was that the song was not fluent. It was well executed at some places, yet at other times, you just broke the rithm without transition anyhow and got to another part. You need to folow a "logical" pattern, just like when writing a text.
0:37 was... um, you get it, right?? Not the good notes!
I knew this was rough, but I've got to work on smoothing out songs. This was, in some ways, a demo.
Thanks for the review though!