This isn't a bad song at all, it's got some great melodies. But Mr Ashes was correct about that pedal. If you wanted to enter this as a metal song, he would need to add a lot more distortion, your bass playing was great though, and the drummer sounded like he had a hard role to fill in that song but he seemed to keep up well. Sounds like a fairly technical song, there's a lot of cool stuff going on, but I wouldn't really say it's a metal song, it's more like prog rock or something, nevertheless, still sounds great, so good work!