Very interesting track. It reminds me almost of Them Crooked Vultures. The goal was met. I'm hearing metal and blues seamlessly fused together, and the result is refreshingly unique.
That said, instruments aren't mixed very well. It sounds like everything was recorded live, but with no editing of any kind. Sections like the one at 1:40 sound awkward, and could definitely use some work in the editing room. The solo at around the five minute mark also fell flat for me. I also didn't really like the vocal work. It sounded like yelling, and the lyrics weren't very easy to understand. I suspect that may have a little to do with lack of editing, but I'm not sure. It's been a LONG time since I recorded anything.
As you noticed, we're still in the process of mixing this. Sadly the things you're pointing out are all Robbie's domain; the strong part of almost every other band is our weak part: vocals and guitar.
It seems you just don't like the doom breaks as a whole. >:(. I don't know if I can fix that or not...
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.