ah yes.. THIS SONG.
I love the piano, and the vocals.. however this song hugely suffered from bad mixing practices.. the piano is just too low - if you want it to sound far away imo it should be a tad warmer and more washed out..
the vocals are just too... plain.. they should be cradled more into the mix - they distract too much from the bg due to improper mixing. I think with some tweaks this song could have really shined.
And yeah more despair in the lyrics in execution would have been a bit better I think.. You had the right idea.. it was just a bit awkwardly executed. But still a noteworthy attempt!
Thank you, Chronamut! The way you say "THIS SONG" seems so...ominous...
I truly appreciate another honest round of criticism from our estimable NAC judges. I know what I need to work on in the future. In a word: mixing. I also can't help but agree that the lyrics could have used more, hmm...depths of the abyss? If afforded another chance one day, I'll have to see what I can do about yanking my heart out of my chest, throwing it on the floor, and stomping it into an amorphous lump of jelly. Metaphorically speaking, of course.
The piano composition was pretty cool although the samples were pretty weak. The singing didn't do it for me, it was too loud for the rest of the music, if you had mixed your tracks better, the vocals could have blended a lot better with the music yet still sound clearly. I liked the use of the hapsicord (right?) but it made the song convey more evil than despery. The lyrics were a bit trite too haha great composition still!
Thanks, Evil-Dog! I appreciate the honest criticism. Admittedly, mixing vocals is not my strong suit...yet. As in all things, practice makes perfect. The lyrics were primarily an afterthought to the instrumentals in this case, and the overall triteness cannot be denied. Then again, this was a NAC where emo goes to die, so they felt appropriate for the whole "my life sucks, so I might as well die" mentality. Heh.
Another nice song from this wonderful and depressive contest. I feel there are still something is missing from the melodies. Vocals are creepy also.
Overall everything is nicely planned.
Thanks for the review! In this case, I will take creepy as a compliment. It works for the theme.
This piece wasn't originally meant to be lyrical, but I decided to decided to write and record some for the sake of the NAC. Besides, the instrumentals sounded lonely without them, and the song still needed that certain...je ne sais quoi.
A beautiful piece, It really touches you deep down. Hardship and suffering, often feels suffocating tense which is captured. But I will be honest in saying you may need a better quality of mic just to get those vocals a bit crisper :3. As they are I feel their getting a bit lost in the audio.
Thanks for the honest review. I've been seriously considering rerecording the lyrics to see if I can mix them a little better with the instrumental track. I just need to find the right time to do it. :)
Good stuff, man. Good stuff.
Thanks! Now I'm gonna go cut myself...
...a piece of cake!
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