At least it's heavyish and that phrygian synth thing was the coolest part. Maybe you should have made that the chorus or verse and not that Born of Osiris riff. A little basic with all the drills and low end riffs, interesting though. Sounds like a few bands though, and that Dimmu part at the end was interesting. Drums and synth were the best parts. Try reaching out of the box and taking risks. Really take risks with writing. Get way out there and shit starts to hit the fan. Good or bad, it's better than being 'average'
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.