PolyVerse is right on. It sounds great, but bass-driven music needs something to boom; to be the power in the track. Keep what you have, but give it some roar to justify that hyper drum and the abrupt ending that feels like it belongs in a song that would explode if someone didn't force it to stop.
something needs to stand out more. nothing is the leader
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