This was not bad the voice is good and pretty deep enough, some more effort should go into this more with deeper "PASSION" and when doing these reels no need for the telling that its a voice reel just get right into it start with scene then next and so fourth, nice accent though.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
More variaty and change it up from time to time.
Very good work for your first try.
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