This isnt bad at all. Could use a little work on the transitions but other than that it has potential.
I have remixed this song a total of 3 times and I get better every time i make a new remix. Currently my 3rd remix (Ice Cap Act 3) is probably the best remix i have done. You should def check it out and let me know what you think.
Again keep at it. This is an amazing song to remix and there are so many ways to remix it. You will only get better with every mix.
Keep up the good work.