Since i haven't heard the original song that this is a remake of, I'm judging this based on how it sounds as a separate song.
The transition from the vocal reverb and stutter to the massive bass sound is just too jumpy, just too sudden. The bass can't just lead the song on it's own, you need some other instruments to back it up.
It's also too repetitive, and when i listened to it for an extended period of time, i got sick of the bass if i'm honest. Make it interesting and different, make the audience engage into the song more.
You really need to work on this song if it is to be successful, as i can't really see much to like.
Except the drums, they're awesome. Keep them as they are, you could make them stronger if you wanted.
Please take my advise kindly, i don't want to sound like an Internet troll.
Yeah, how you said... My first survive is repetitive, and I wanted to do something like that... I'm that type, when I hear a mass of sound, I can't hear a song, I hear 'Mess'. So, I still train that instinct (or how said that...). You're right, but I'm still... Rookie, maybe I'll do something much later.