Not bad, I would chance a few major and minor things tho:
-The sound pack you used sounds cheap, not really fitting kick for example
-The drop sounds cheap, also due to the soundpack I think
-The melodie is somewhat annoying at some points
-It goes wÃ¡Ã¡Ã¡y too fast for a trance song lol
-You faded the nice melodie in the background, 4:45 and on you hear it more clearly.
Good job, but needs alot of work