I like some of the sounds you've got going here. It does stagnate a bit throughout though, which I think could be helped by varying up the beat you've got going. Right now you only have the kick drum, as far as I can tell -- adding in a snare/clap and/or some hi-hats would help liven things up a little and keep a sense of forward momentum. Just my opinion, obviously -- you may not want that much motion, I dunno. Hope this helps!
Thanks for the review, it helped quite a bit. I updated, and the addition of a hat makes the song sound far better, in my opinion. Also, I fixed a couple of unmatching patterns and made a few things sound all around better, so feel free to check it out again whenever. C:
I use a demo of FL Studio 10. Check out my songs, maybe we can do a song together. Great song!