Seems like a good work in progress to me. I did like your build up and the strings. Your drums seemed to sound misplaced but it didn't take a lot away from the composition. There is a clear build up of the instruments and it makes me want to know what comes next. Over all it just needs to be finished. hope to hear it when its done.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.