Nice melody, but the chord progressions could be a lot smoother. And you could add a bit more variety, it sounds kind of monotonous in the middle (literally meaning one (mono) tone repeated too many times). Possibly you could add a few more parts like a violin or similar instrument. Overall its a very nice beginning to what could become a great piece.
Aye, thanks for the tips! Part two will be a lot more developed, and I'll keep a lot of what you've said in mind.