Right from the start, all I noticed is the bad saturated mix. Don't let your music peak man, that's music making 101. Now with the song, the actual music is pretty cool and the vocals are decent. I don't know if it connects well with the contest theme though. Has not fallen in love with it.
I love the keys in this. Also, really cool that you added vocals for this contest. Nice lyrics too. Great track man.
MASTER YOUR SONGS DUDE!
haha.. too loud and peakish.. you gotta rein in your levels.. those lyrics are great though so they do make up for the bad mixing hehehe,..
and nice filtered piano/pad/strings combo in the bg :)
still gotta dock you points for clipping though.
I could see this on the radio - this kinda reminds me of old Linkin Park music - esp. that rapper doubled sound effect - refreshing!
also kudos to actually singing - I hate rap songs where it's just all monotone - yours feels like it has actual emotion to it :)
I also liek the chill sounds you got going on in the bg.. it's more kinda like oldschool rap in a way..
I like the beginning. A lot. It's really pretty. The vocals could sit more forward in the mix, I'm having a bit of trouble catching the lyrics. There we go, once it got to the chorus, the vocals stood out more. I think the snare/clap sample could be a bit different; it sounds like it's clipped; it also feels really high end heavy, a bit more body in the snare would help quite a bit. On another note, you've got some nice flow. The backbeat could live with a bit more variation, it's pretty much the same through the entire song. I think that the harmonic progression you chose, the chords you used worked really well for this song. And personally, I prefer the singing portions to the rapping portions, but that's neither here nor there.
10/10 for continuity
9/10 for composition
8/10 for vocals
8/10 for catchiness
I think the vocals could be redone, they seem a bit muddy or hard to understand at some points. Or maybe if you brought the vocals a tiny bit more forward in the mix or panned some of the other sounds off center, it would help make the vocals more clear.
-NAC Judge, [mod15]
haha, unlike dosko I really loved the directions you went in. I felt like the entire track could have used better production but aside from the audio quality this track was really fun. Good vibes, good rhymes and some melodic style to move the track in some interesting directions.
To help with that quality, start with the drums. They sounded incredibly lo-fi. Try a different kit maybe? Try compressing or EQing them to make them sound cleaner. They were just way too thin for me. Fatten them up by layering some more drums on top of them. An electronic drum kit doesn't have to have just one snare. Put in a few new ones that will hit different areas of the sound spectrum. Create new sounds by layering old ones. You could also look into a technique called side chaining. Side chaining controls the levels of one instrument with the levels of another. Example, side chain that piano to the bass drum and the snare to help clean up the mix/ create room for other sounds.
The vox could go for a better mic/ recording but that would cost money so I understand if your'e not feeling that avenue. You have some serious potential though and I'd love to hear you pursue this sound . Peace and good luck sir:)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.