Instead of giving the away the full melody at the beginning, build it up. Also make your kick harder, add a stronger bass synth. And for your transitions ( remember this is trance ) use more sweeps - up and down. Not just a reversed cymbal crash. ( And if u do add a reversed cymbal crash add some reverb.)
But good melody anyways.
Thanks for the comment! I might look at that if i revisit this song in the future. Plus it also gives me bits of advice for my next stuff so thank you!