Lovely! Unexpected dissonance that very nicely to create a dramatic chord pattern. The sticatto is nice and with the high tempo it grabbed me. When the bass notes come in at 0:10 i thought this was going to be something really great, they worked perfectly, but then you lost me a little bit with the arpeggio/melody part at 0:18, it felt a little tacked on, and like you hadn't really spent that long deciding which notes to use. IT works better as the other parts enter, and i was thoroughly enjoying it again at 0:40. It definitely shows a lot of potential, and as you say it's a work in progress. Keep it at!