Good intro, good singing, lame text (sorry :P) and a good ending.
The intro was was really good, but after I heard the intro, I heard the whole song. That's pretty much a shame with acoustic music.
Assuming it's you singing here (you are, I know) you sing like a pro. You should do something with that. I mean it. Not many people can sing well these days.
With songs I think you should broaden your horizon with music. You can find lots of non-pop songs that are great too.
This is coming from a pop (and rap and hip-hop)-hater, though.
Anyway, I don't think at all that you fucked up at the end, it was well done, don't be harsh on yourself.
I'll just give this a 8/10 and so a 4/5 and hope you'll let me review your next audio too!