Good stuff but you can make it work much better

You are a neat guitar player, so cheers for that. Please tune it better next time, especially the intro slices through my ear drums... :)

About the drumming - aside from that they're too loud in the mix in my opinion - it seems to me like you recorded them directly from playing them on a keyboard. You deserve a pat on the back for the way you put a solid drum sound together. However, it goes out of tempo a lot, and then you probably had to adjust your guitar playing to it. It might be the other way around, but it's a pity because it really distracted me.

I don't know what software you use to record it, but most recording programs have some kind of grid function to polish MIDI-based recording into a solid tempo. Try experimenting with that, or just develop the skill to create a whole drum score in a fixed tempo.

I hope you continue making stuff because it sounds like you could become a worthy, authentic addition to the portal. Keep it up!

I'm not by a long shot suggesting that my music is perfect or that I have established myself here - please check out my stuff and feel free to point out any flaw you can find :)

3/5 for now for this song, but I'll try to keep an eye on your progress. Peace.