Nice tune here
hmmm now i like the softness of it but i do think you had too much of the soft sounding at the start, maybe give it a somewhat bigger build up and comming in faster, now you do present a dark touch here with this track wich is pretty impressive, so good job on the darkness of it all, but it needs a faster build up, but other then that it was pretty decent, maybe abit long but again its alright and i liked it.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
shorten it somewhat, and give it a faster build up at the starting.
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