I would buy this. Wow.
I like the lyrics, you have grade A writing I think. I think I'll be singing and humming this song this week.
The breakdown is awesome. I dunno, I can feel it in my body, ya know what I mean?
I like your sound as well, it sounds truly Grunge. A sounds that new stuff hasn't been able to find well since the early 90s.
I tried to find some kind constructive criticism, but every time i think of something, I can't suggest anything because everything adds to your unique sound, and I wouldn't want to suggest something that would talk away from something you have already found.
You've got yourself a new fan here, sirs :)