Sounds are not right
The arrangement of the song is pretty nice. I think the piano is a bit loud in the mix and goes on for a little to long to keep interesting, but it's ok. The sounds in the start sound really dull. Cheap and as if they were pulled from the libarary without doing anything to them.
The drums at 1:10 are pretty terrible. They kick in like the drummer forgot to pick up his sticks at the right time, but they correct themselves later (luckily)
The drums and synth at 2:20 sound empty too. Try adding something to that arrangement, since it sounds empty. Since it is already in the middle of the song, it should be more entertaining and not an outro already.
The best advice I could give you is that you should put some more effort in mixing and getting the right sounds. This is what makes this song pretty bad. The strings sound pretty good, but I hate the piano, drums and bass. Some EQ might fix this.
Overall I hear a lot of potential, but skills aren't really there yet. Keep practicing!