Expand on it maybe?
Not going to lie, at first I was like eh... it sounded really badly encoded or the sound bitrate was terrible. It was very +volume heavy sounding. But the rhythm was very catchy.. but then it died off fast.
I think you should go back to this and expanded a bit on this and keep the flow going.. don't kill it off so quick.
thanks a lot for your constructed criticism,I actually wanted to last the original way longer than that but then I figured it would be too repetitive but nevermind...