You've got a great-sounding piece here, but it needs work.
First, I think you need an intro. It's really up to you, but it seems like this starts very suddenly with the very best part of the song.
Second, you need to add more variation. The repetition gets quite boring pretty fast; it's just not good enough to repeat that long.
Third, I love the start, but the rest of the song kind of beats it down.
Thanks for the advice, I completely agree with you haha.
To be honest, this is the first song I created and was somewhat happy with.
I have almost no experience in any genre other than metal and hardcore but I wanted some advice on this sort of stuff to better my work so once again, thank you. :)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.