The whistle in the percussion is really out of place.
I like the background strings in :40, they fit in well. As for the piano at 1:00, I'd suggest a less electronic sounding one so it fits in with the theme better. The guitar fits perfectly though, although maybe a few harmonies would sound nice with it.
The french horn (I think that's what it is anyways) has some slower sections that seem to draw the song out a bit.
I like the reverse cymbal at 3:06, but it'd fit better if it wasn't at the end, and it led into some nice harmonies and percussive beats.
Overall, nice piece, but it has some flaws (namely the whistle... which in my opinion doesn't seem to work as percussion unless you're composing for kids' music; it doesn't suit the genre or tone of this piece)
Damn. I made this song forever ago, and didnt expect to see a review on it. Anyway thanks for it.
Now for the true response:
I made this a long time ago, as aforementioned, so I wasnt brilliant in music. I plan to redo this and add harmonies and stuff to make it sound pretty. Why I picked an electronic organ is beyond me today, however I do know why I used a whistle. I originally intended this to be part of a much larger piece to make a long instrumental story about a guy who breaks out of jail and then other crap happens to him. The slow part was meant to represent him n jail, and the whistle was meant to be a prison guard. Looking back it doesn't fit, but it made sense in context, but in context alone. And yes, it was a french horn.
One day, I may remake this song, and I'll remember your comments sir!