awkward.

indeed, awkward is the word for this.

as far as suggestions go, i would suggest you start from the bottom up. get yourself a good percussion track first then add onto that. or begin with a good bassline to drive the track. random notes placed all willy-nilly usually do not result in a song.

everything about this is random. i appreciate randomness as much as the next guy, but none of this pieces together well.

hope to see improvement. cheers!