It's a good idea, but try using different instruments. The 8-bit FQ really turned me off from this tune. Also, try to figure out where your trying to go with this. It seems really random and directionless.
Maybe, it you change the instruments, you can get some more narrative ideas to build it up and make it more dynamic.
thank you for the feedback :} and i will change the 8 bit tones tomorow when i can and i will try and change the sctructure a bit, thankyoooou!!!!! :}