that progression...

sounds very very familiar. i believe it's known as the "magic chords". any song sounds good with it :)

i've never really listened to this genre much, so i can't offer advice specific to the genre, however i don't think its a bad start. the bass that comes in at 1:19 sounds a bit scratchy/unmastered. i'd try getting that part of the song mastered so it's more of a true wobble, otherwise your buildups are great, and the voice that comes in at the peak of each one tops them off :)

the ending was good, i like songs that have a unique ending as opposed to just fading out or something else all too common.

keep up the great work :)