Sick rhymes
You got the rhymes down packed, and for the most part the flow is decent. I like the abstract yet direct lyrics real sick mix of it here. I'd say work on your delivery so that you can make those lyrics stick in the listeners ears, right now, your very monotone, sounds almost like your bored; with practice you'll learn how really get into the words your flowing. Keep at it Freestyle Uprising.
This track isnt a freestyle is it?