Heh, I can hear the star wars melody, and the modifications you did to it.
I think, you should have had low background strings going on at all times. There were a lot of silent moments, which kinda made the song boring to listen to.
It did however get more and more interesting as it progressed.
I didn't quite like the direction this song was taking, but I still found it enjoyable.
4/5 from me caffeinerush, but I see there are 0 voters lurking on your page, so i'm giving it a 5.