Not bad dude. Definitely getting better. I would agree, though. The beat is just a bit off. Other than that it sounds nice.
Alignment is a beat off. The first 2 notes should be a pickup, as in the third note should be where everything else starts.
I just put that together in about 15 minutes, so there are a few things that are off. When I make the final one, I will correct them. As far as the alignment being a beat off, do you mean the timing of the kick compared to the other notes? I will listen to the original again and see how the Bass made it, and adjust as such. Thanks for the comment and your time.