Music by Stavia
Voice and lyrics by BahbahBurten
Stavia wrote all the music for this song. It didn't have any lyrics so I offered to do a rap and vocal melody with some of my poetry. This is what came of it. Hopefully you like it.
Walking towards some memories 4X
I'm walking toward some memories
Passin on the right side to the tide and keepin to myself
Placed by my mind for me to see\
Lifes and lights and smiles and cries
Excised from the times which they reside
Abject to change no matter how cursed or deranged
I remember her face her place color of the sky and her suitcase
Hands calloused Tan elucidating the plan from the man that I once respected
A boy with the heart of a bear
who fought like a killer but only cause he cared
Love of a mother intent on teaching not preaching the burden of affection and infection into reason
I stand beside and speculate
Try to revise and recreate
No matter how I direct it, I can't correct it
Remorse and pain are copyright protected
Well I'm walking toward these memories, faded dreams and tattered seams
Looking at the image of the man they made
The rules he broke, the ones he obeyed
I rather enjoy these lyrics. This type of music, though not truly my cup of tea, allows the listener to really focus in on what is said. And I'm certain you put a bit of work into these due to the word choice and some of the trickier lines.
My only hang-up, and it really is a small one, is that your voice doesn't quite fit the genre implied. May it be the effects or just your natural timbre.
I enjoyed the singing, though. The singing was wonderful.
I love it!
This, sir, is pretty damn nice. A newer spin on modern hip hop. The lyrics are good, as is the instrumental!
Ergh
Okay, I like the chorus and all that jazz, but the filter you are using or the bounce back from the vocals is discouraging due to it sounding like you are in a room. I think a good contrast would to keep the chorus voice the same, but make the actual words of the song crisp like the song is. If you listen, the music is very crisp and continuing the vocals in that distortion kinda conflicts with the music. Ya gotta let it flow with the music which gives it a better flow. If it is just a regular recording and that is how it came out, try to put up something in your recording room to dampen the bounce back of your voice. If not, just take out the filter on the lyrics, but keep it on for your chorus.
Thats just my take on it :D
Thanks. Honest opinions with presentable solutions are the best kind.
Well done
Wow man, when I heard Stavier's song I imagined the vocals a lot different. But this is pretty cool. I think the quality could be better, but I'm experimenting with vocals too and I know it's freakin hard. Good mic, layering etc..
Keep it up mate, I like the rhymes
Thanks. I really appreciate the review
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
BahBahBurten 
