Excellent voice,excellent song.I hope you will make your way to the top64 in Audio Deathmatch,and reach even further.

I really like how you are AWESOME at singing.

It's good.

It's massively impressive, however I think it can be better.

First minute is great

Second minute is great

Fifth minute is great

From 2:30 things get same-y and remain that way til 4 mins. I would recommend doing something else with that minute and a half. There's this thing in literature (most media) where showing too much of the same lessens the impact, and I think it's that minute and a half.

Another suggestion, but this is only personal preference, is to play around a bit more with that guitar starting at 2:28; it's a great sound but there can be more done with it.

You could even use that bit from 4:00 - 4:50 as a kind of chorus, transpose it to the 3 minute mark just to break things up a bit; a mild climax which comes back down to the guitar again and a few more verses. Playing around with the drums a bit would also help.

I was thinking of Placebo's 20 Years which gets away with it because it keeps the listener in suspense with promises of an ever building climax; then he breaks you down with orgasm denial... *cough*

Meh, I'm trying to be helpful here but failing. I really like the song.

I Love It

Nice voice plus make more =D

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You got a good a voice. The instrumental in this song is actually quite great. Some parts of the vocals don't exactly "fit."
"Is this retreat
the only choice there is left for me?"
and
"And yet I know it's all my fault for walking
Barefoot in a field of glass but...
I will not fall"
sound a bit out of place. The rhythm is slightly weird in these areas and not exactly comfortable to hear. Other than that there are few problems with this piece. keep working at it.