Its too repetitive and drawn out. Its the same progression for 2 minutes. You voice is a little weak and off key a parts. The harmony only serves to make the song messy. There is heart in this song which is good. the music surrounding it needs improvement
Thank you very Much for the review. The song actually has 3 parts which it go through, not just one. My voice isnt the strongest becasue im mostly just a guitarist but this is when i get too have some fun and try to write my own music. Thank you very much though and I will take youre comments into consideration adn improve my writing.