At first, the lead is odd, and overpowering, it follows some good notes, but in my opinion, probably needs to be tweaked, or changed entirely.
The mini sweep at 0:14 that signals the start of that little house/dance part is neat, it sounds nice (the house/dance part it is), but it also sounds weird at the same time, it probably needs a bit of fixing.
Alright, things to fix? Tone down the volume of the snare, maybe bring the kick up a bit, and add a little bit more bass. Oh, and most of all? Make it longer.
Too short at the moment.
Still, nice job.