Coals to Cross


Author Comments

Lyrics are as follows:

i walked on burning coals
so i could make the centerfold
a tricky ladder made to break

carpenter oh hear my plea
so you can send one back to me
as I kiss the ground with dirty knees

looking back i start to see
that nothing is ahead of me
because im breathing here and now

illusions start to fade
cut down with a double edged blade (higher, builds stregth to chorus)

and now i see that i was wrong
because theres nothing wrong at all
the earth cracked open and i fell fell fell
and still i fall

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Good Tune

Nice lyrics but the vocals are weak and off key at times. The whispering instead of singing fits for parts but not the whole song. Need more diaphragm and less throat in your voice. You can still sing quiet without whispering it just requires more presence and a stronger diaphragm to sing from. Vocal exercises can fix that no prob. Otherwise its a good tune

Drums...Leave them out

I love the melody. The individual guitar is very enjoyable. Your? voice is okay; I like it for this song. The DRUMS. They cloud the "prettiness" of the guitar with their mediocrity. Vocals are most important my friend. I want to hear your interesting lyrics that is what I enjoy the most. I personally enjoy acoustic music but this works for me. Last thing take it or leave it. Change the lyrics and make the first stanza 4 lines singing the second two lines as you sang the first two. Repeat for the second stanza. Keep the third stanza the same. Don't sing "cut down with a double edge blade" higher it just doesn't sound good. Last stanza, I would sing it twice after the 1st guitar breakdown, before 2;34. So yup, take it or leave it

Ten Thumbs Up!!!

I love it, I hope to hear more of this kind of indie rock from you!

Credits & Info


3.67 / 5.00

Jul 18, 2011
11:38 PM EDT
File Info
5.4 MB
2 min 58 sec

Licensing Terms

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