Im going to list some things about the song and tell how you can fix them.
There were some off notes. Try to stick to certain scale.
Experiment with the basic 4 beat kick progression. Your perccussion stood out, but the different parts of it varied a bit too much.
Try using a bassline as well. It gives your music a better feel to it.
Try to also use 3xosc. It looks basic, but if you experiment with it you can make it sound pretty good. Also try to learn how to use the mixer if you havent already. Later on you will need to know how to use effects. And if you want to use vocals try to make your own or find samples on the internet. This is pretty good for a first song. Hell, it was better than my first one. Inbox me if you have any questions. Oh and if you are new to Newgrounds then Welcome to Newgrounds.
Thanks for the criticism dude i really think this will help me in later songs i make.