work!

Has the beginning of a great song, but fails to deliver the bass rhythm of one. would sound better if a deep bangin bass came on say.. 20 or 30 seconds into it to fill the gap created by having a an interesting solo melody at the beginning.

later on, u could add a higher pitched melody that harmonizes with the one in the beginning- then ur song might be a 7 or 8 ; )

id love to see this one revamped :D