I'd have to say--I really, really like the beginning. But, after 00:22 it immediately cut off to a whole new genre in my opinion, which I could't get used to at first...But then you brought back what happened in the very beginning and started to merge the two marts together as you went. That was genius. Then it really starts to pick up around 01:40, with the slight key change. I think you ended it ok, the ending doesn't bother me and I think it passes sooooo...also while listening to this I really found how hard you worked on this song, with using the layers and such...Did you write this yourself?
Also, i'm quite surprised that this has no reviews till now, because this has gotten over 100 views and even a submission.
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