Quite nice quality
I don't really have anything to go on here, I have no idea who you're trying to sound like.
Mic quality is crisp, no problems there. You sound very confident, which is really a good trait for a voice actor trying to get noticed.
My only problem is that you don't sound like the most enthusiastic commentator here. Sure, you're full of energy, but I'm sure you could squeeze out a tad more enthusiasm about the game you're supposed to be commenting on.
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