much more practice
its hard to tell if this is real hip-hop cause there is no gutter to it and its real simple and soft get some beter drum samples loops
Your melodies are nice, but you need to work on your beats, if possible hit up cajete about it...
Hes a real good guy hell more than likely help you out, I've got where i have because of him so...
But i really liked the melody man, get some new samples and write a sick beat to it, youll be looking good :)
Kepp stepping man