This isn't too bad, actually
The intro + outro are great, though they take a little more time from the track than they should. The vocals are quite good, for what they are - even the regular singing works when you can hear it (though as it's mixed, right now, for most of that section the guitars drown the vocals completely). The guitar work is heavy, chuggy and awesome.
I liked it quite a bit, overall. Rock on, man. \m/ ( -_- ) \m/