Just the sounds, man
On the introduction, that oscillating sweep is a little off time and very mismatched from the guitar. Later, that pluck seems out of place over it. Also the drums sound a little mundanely robotic. Good musical concepts, but the sounds you chose just don't fit together great.
That is why it is a preview. It isn't totally finished. I listened to the sounds you were talking about and they didn't seem out of place to me. Then again I am working with a laptop and headphones cause of my current living conditions. So that may be why I do not hear what you hear.
I found your author's comments to be inspring, as well as the track itself. I really enjoyed listening to this. The synths were really cool and futuristic sounding, and the melodies were beautiful and catchy. Also, thank you for your service to this country. :D
Thanks. It is hard at times to make or find time to make music. Heck it can be down right impossible at times. However, this track is coming of it. Might take me some more time to refine the track, want to keep the futuristic feel as well as the melodic harmony I have going.
Thanks for saying my Author Comments were inspiring. I proudly serve in the US Army and have been for 7 years. Which can make for good music and good stories if one is inclined to either.