Don't know what the previous reviewer wants but judging a tune just with "theoretical" shit ruins the music. Get some feelings fella.
Anyways, to the track itself. You could have used some other VST's. The one's you've selected sound very flat without a good vibe. If the tune sounds that way in the original too, it's just fine but I think you can do much better.
Keep it up!
Thanks for your vote, DarKsidE555! You voted 4 for -> JJR: Turtemple <-, raising its score from 2.86 to 3.00.
C to C sharp... got old after first few measures.
Ooh, then C to C sharp to D sharp? Wow, variety!
Riiiiiiiiiiight, that does make sense...