Quite good for a new music producer. Actually, it's hard to believe you've only worked with whatever program you're using for 5 hours.
This may not have much coherence, but it is well made and well mixed all around. Very dramatic. Please keep it up!
Problems I noticed:
-The bass from 0:16 to 0:22 seems off. Slightly out of place.
-The bits are a bit too short, I'd extend each "section" a bit longer, put some more variation in.