After all those positive votes you receive (you're at 4.77 for the moment after 7 ratings), I was expecting something excellent...
But in my opinion it's not a good song.
Let's begin with the beginning. Fondamentally, the very first mesures are not bad. Those 4 sharp notes and your other voice make an ok small melody. But ok for an introduction or a break. It's really really too repetitive. And undstandable at the end. It seems to me that you forgot this sharp melody that stays here from the beginning to the end, But you can't leave a pattern of 4 notes in 4 mesures in the whole song, particularly when it is that prevalent.
To come back to the beginning, the entrance of a pattern of drum step by step is too cliche, and too long. That leads to the fact that after 1 minute, the song didn't really started, and is during on one "melody" of 4 mesures. And when you expect it to do so, at 0:54, the drums are muted, and finally you realize that's not gonna start until a moment.
It starts for real at 2:34. But at this moment it's too late. Cause if this part can be nice objectively (good drums, nice superposition of voices, even if there isn't melody, that make a nice ambient), you have ruined it by inflicting us the sharp 4 (lethal) mesures since the very beginning.
So finally, you have only patterns that you overuse, while the rest is too empty next to it. You repeat far away too much your different instruments (4 sharp notes, 4 violin notes that are always the same, same kicks, etc.), without making any transitions, without playing on any effect, or even without proposing (another) melody with each voice
Making a song with a superposition of instruments that play 4 equal notes with 2voices and the last one that plays only 2 can't be enough. And the drums that can be good at some moments are not suffisient to take up the rest of the song.
So I'll give you some points for the choice of your instruments (except for the violin that doesn't sound nice and doesn't have its place here in my opinion, cause it doesn't particularly suit the atmosphere) and for the drums after their entrance. And one point for your work.
Understand me well I'm not giving you a low rate because You are on top. I do it cause I don't like the song your proposed. I hope you'll understand the criticism.
3 and 1.
Lol dude, you don't have to be that harsh. This is supposed to be an ear-pleasing DANCE song that I whipped out in less than five hours for fun. And the emphasis is on the bass and kicks and sub-bass. I understand it's repetitive but I don't think your ears are bleeding from this song. Are you deaf now that you've listened to this song? Thanks for the criticism but talk about encouragement.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.