One of the best rap songs i've heard no joke, I love the flow keep it up.
I was just checking out the front page of the audio submissions and I clicked on this. I didn't realize it was by you ET. Pretty decent.
You are on the bridge of being a decent, radio-quality rapper. The track you chose is perfect. The lyrics are fine; you got decent metaphors and funny lines. The only problem is you really got to work on your meter. You trying to say too many words in too few measures and it comes off like you're rushing through the song and not in that supa-fast-Busta-Rhymes lyricist way. More in a Micro Machines Hip Hop sort of way. Example:
dont startle me[you had to start this early], hold your hands out moNEY [reversed the emphasis so you could say it quicker] I better see
or you'll catch a bruisin' with an imprint of my pinky ring, I'm [next line starts early so you can fit it in]
A (slightly) more on-meter rhyme would be:
Don't startle me.. hold your hands out, show me bills
Or you'll catch a bruisin with my loser-slappin' skills,
Also not perfect, but I can say it without stepping over the next line. Listen to even the *worst* rapper on the radio, and the one thing he'll have is his meter down.
I like the honesty, and that you sound like you are actually trying to help me out. Thanks for taking the time yeah.
that was freakin' hilarious! and really well done! i just have to say that for he hook, only about 3 repeats are really necessary.
This was an old N.W.A. beat so I didn't want to tamper with it. Thanks for the review holmes!
all i got say is respect the song off the hook
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.