I like the general composition of it in terms of the piece, but man I'm just not feeling the instruments, and the percussion doesn't seem to go well with it for me. Could use a heavy bass drum in it in my opinion, but other than that and maybe changing the synths so they don't sound so harsh would be all I can offer for advice, or opinion.
Aye, the synths and drums are just based on presets for now, I'm gonna tweak the shit out of them. This was just an attempt to get the composition and harmonies right. I'll definitely work on the harshness though, thanks.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.