Your bass line feels just a tad too heavy, to the point where your higher notes tend to be drowned out. Bass is a good thing if used in a balanced sort of way, loud and heavy hits, or as an underlined theme, like an overall tone of voice. If compared to words and sentence structure, think of it as the tone of voice, or as the timber of the voice, while the words and punctuation of the sentence is your upper register. You dont just want to hear what someone is saying, and you dont just want to know how they say it. Music is the same. Pull the Valk forward and use that as the voice, with the Incep as the underlier, the foundation.
If you meant it to come out as it is, just keep that in mind for anything else you compose or create. Its good, dont get me wrong. This is meant as constructive criticism, not just bad criticism, so I will leave you with something positive.
You have talent and an ear for the sounds. These go quite well together, and aside from the balance issue I mentioned, both sounds are wonderful compliments to each other. Keep up the work!
Goodness, I never expected to hear this song again! lol
I'll be honest, in 2011, I barely had an idea what I was doing composition wise, so all of your commentary is entirely correct. In fact, if you had gave tihs song paragraphs of bile negativity and criticisms, I would have just smiled, pointed at the screen, nodded, and said: "Yo, this man be right!"
I should probably remake this so we can bury this version somewhere deep(er) into the internet.